Slightly better editing, most of the same substance, looks like an edit of a base Aniplex script. Interesting.
Punctuation usage in a lot of places is ??? though, and while there's a few more really good lines, there's also some really bad ones that aren't in Aniplex.
Seems like six of one and half a dozen of the other.
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